Digipak/Poster design development

This ws my first test on creating the effect I want to have for my digipak
and poster I like how it looks but I have decided to use a smoke effect instead
of broken glass

Digipak ideas

JONES

First Draft Feedback: 

Positives: 

• I think the effects you have played around with are really effect and present a clear message of this person that has been lost. 
• I love the variation of camera angles and the pace of your shots is really good as well. 
• The beginning lip sync is really good and starts the song in an engaging way.
• I like your choice of ending Harry - your character is in the same position as the start and the fade out of lights is an effective metaphor in keeping with the song.  

Areas for improvement:

• Look at the lipsync in the concert shots. Some of them are out of time. 
• Fill in the gaps with your time lapse idea etc. 
• There is red eye in some of the night scenes and the concert scenes that would be worth addressing for a more professional look. 

Things to consider: 

• The opening shot with the paper doesn't seem to fit with the bright colour of the bedding - have a look at how you could rework this or change the colour saturation so that it looks more continuous.